Would you read this story? Please?

I think it's good, and you definately have talent. You could make a little more descriptive language though and perhaps make the prolouge part of 1st chapter? And you definately need to make the chapters bigger-longer. I also think you should develop Zach and Chloes relationship over a longer period. Please do not think of this as horrible or mean-just a bit of advice. Also, I love the idea, and it pulls me in. XD