Help edit goal essay for job corps?

Why did you write all that? i mean its good. but its for job corps. i didn't have to write anything and my friends that went there maybe wrote two sentences. personally, i have no idea why you would want to go there. it is a terrible place that only helps you know stuff about the street( i come from an upper class family, i was sent to job corps as a punishment). it doesnt matter what type of person you are either way your gonna be treated like garbage.